Very enjoyable read. The only part I really stumbled on was:

lifting them from muck to substance
blinding them to earth's entrapments,

entrapments seemed awkward.

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Unfortunately, I type faster than I think.

Wow, that was a fast comment ^_^; thank you.

I see what you mean, I kinda made that line sorta awkward when I broke the pattern of rhythm on that line... but I suppose the word "entrapments" is also a little awkward... I'll reflect on it...

Again, thank you ^_^ I see you've written some stuff too, so I'll try to take a look at what you've written sometime soon.

Thank you. I would appreciate that.

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I always find pleasure in your pieces ^_^ This one took me into another world and I enjoyed it. These lines were actually my favorite "lifting them from muck to substance,/blinding them to earth's entrapments" I love the way you placed "entrapments" It unsettled the poem but in a very good way. Oh, and "peirce" should be spelled "pierce" Overall I really really like this. Great job once again

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Yay~ I'm glad you liked it ^___^
I really admire you work, but sadly I haven't had time to read any literature from dA recently... and by "recently" I mean "in the past 3 months"... ><;

Hopefully I'll have some time this weeked and I'll comment on some of your works.

Anyway, thanks for bringing the spelling error to my attention, I'll go fix that right away.

You're comments are so well appreciated ^_^. I haven't been as active as I was before either, but I do have a few new works that I've posted in the past three to four months. Inspiration has been hard to find lately since college is consuming all of my creative writing and room for any new ideas with tons of essays due like every week >.< But hopefully over the winter break my I'll post some more work.

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As always, I’m simply amazed and humbled by your talent and skill. Your work always has this immense level of…maturity that I so rarely see or expect from someone your age. Almost as though I ought to be reading this in an English class, even. Your imagery, especially in both the “glass shut tight to bar the shadows,/drapes drawn in to bar the cold” was excellent, and the final three lines have such a powerful force behind them. Please, please submit this to Calliope if you haven’t already. They could use good writing like this.

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Art is showing others what you live.

I am aware that I'm a young, perhaps naïve artist. I am trying to improve and grow. I want to learn, however I can. I want to see what can be done by others, even myself. Forgive my mistakes - I am always learning.

Wow, thank you so much ^___^
I never thought anyone would like this one so much. It's odd, I didn't post works of this nature originally because I thought people would be almost scared to read them, or they would not grasp what I was trying to say(not trying to sound pretentious or anything... just, I've posted works involving some hard topics lately...) Speaking of which, what did you get out of it anyway?

Also, it's been in the Calliope box in my English class since the first deadline xD I hope they like it as much as you did.

It wouldn't be a stretch to say that people wouldn't grasp what you're trying to say. This is a heavy topic. So I wouldn't call it pretentious. If anything, that's part of why I envy your work. I either use pretty words to describe simple things (Looking Up), or simple language to scratch the surface of big ideas (Rebirth). Never both.

Well, here goes. A figurative man once hid himself from the rest of the world, revelling in ignorance. Some...higher power has cast light on this man, so that he may see the faults of his ways. An epiphany, rebirth of sorts. Where he once felt at home in the shadows and darkness, he now fights against their temptation with everything he has. I know that I've missed much, but every step I take to figuring it out, I think of a reason why it doesn't work.

Haha, excellent.

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Art is showing others what you live.

I am aware that I'm a young, perhaps naïve artist. I am trying to improve and grow. I want to learn, however I can. I want to see what can be done by others, even myself. Forgive my mistakes - I am always learning.