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Heaven's Handlense

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A ray of light falls from the window
perched above, within the wall,
glass shut tight to bar the shadows,
drapes drawn in to bar the cold.
Intensified by the lofty lens,
the pungent stream cuts through to earth,
where lie those who dwell in darkness,
knowing not of wisdom's worth.
Pierce the eyes of drifting wanderers,
shifting through the mire of men,
lifting them from muck to substance,
blinding them to earth's entrapments,
shattered past now burns away,
melted down and cast anew,
giving life from death's decay.
Insulated from life's quarrels
many now would call him mad,
rebuilding life now brick by brick,
nothing left of what he had.
Turned away from hollow treasures
facing now the hallowed light,
eyes averted from the shadows
fights against them with all might.
~Edit: 12/12/08
Just a small spelling error...
Well, actually a couple ^//^



This is part of the 100 Themes challenge (more specifically, "Light"). I would have put that in the title, but it wouldn't fit ^_^; hahah.

I want to submit this to Calliope for the winter issue, so if you read this before then, please feel free to give me some critisism. Of course, even after that, criticism is always appreciated. On that note, I added an extra "e" to the end of "lens" on purpose, in order to create a more... antiquated feel.
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Grifmore's avatar
There are two things i simply love in this poem:
1. The rythm. It has an amazing, floathing speed and the words matches quite well to this flow.
2. The theme and the darkness in it. I like this darkness/alone/death thing in your poem. It's very... solid somehow. Not quite sure how to explain it, but point being I like it ^^

Oh and I read a couple of your poems, and generally I kinda like this of (I don't know if you practice it) direct message and calm style. I tend to find a lot of pseudo intellectual poets out here, but your poems seems somehow different.

Please keep up the good work ^^